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The table shows the proportion of female and male aged 15 and aged 75 from 1911 to 2001 in the UK.

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The table compares the percentage of populations at the age of 15 and 75 by gender of UK in three different years: 1911, 1961 and 2011. In 1911 the population of UK were been reported at 36 million with the people rate 1. 86% aged 15, meanwhile girls a little more than boys. After 50 years, the population significant growth to over 56 million, the proportion of these young was dropped to 1. 23%. However males increased to 354, 400, outnumbered females in 2011 The bottom rate of UK, accounting for 0. 23% was at the age of 75 to over 47, 000 females. The oldest-age population was increasing more than triple in the next century, which gender ratio almost unchanged. The number of female aged 75 was been reported to 210, 000, while this figure of male was reaching 181, 300. Overall, population aged in two sexes which the younger noticeable fall and the older rose significant rise while males both group had increases by various degrees
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at the age of 15 and 75 by gender of UK in three
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years: 1911, 1961 and 2011. In 1911 the
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rate 1. 86% aged 15, meanwhile girls a
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more than boys. After 50 years, the
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significant growth to over 56 million, the proportion of these young
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males increased to 354, 400, outnumbered females in 2011

The bottom rate of UK, accounting for 0. 23% was at the age of 75 to over 47, 000 females. The oldest-age
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was increasing more than triple in the
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reported to 210, 000, while this figure of male was reaching 181, 300.

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,
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aged in two sexes which the younger noticeable fall and the older rose significant rise while males both group had increases by various degrees
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