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The table shows the data about the percentage of money spent on different items in 5 nations such as Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002.

The table shows the data about the percentage of money spent on different items in 5 nations such as Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002. APREN
The table shows the data about the percentage of money spent on different items in 5 nations such as Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002. Overall, it is obvious from the table that the surveyed countries allocated most of their money for food, drink and tobacco and spent the least money on leisure and education. Moreover, Turkey had the highest proportion of the money paid for the three categories in question. First of all, Turkey was the country where citizens spent most of their money on food, drinks and tobacco, about 32. 2%. The figure for Turkey was followed by Ireland which spent around 29%, whereas the figures for other countries were lower than 20%. Turning to the expenditure on clothing and footwear, people in Italy appeared to be the citizens who allocated most of their money for this category, with 9%, while people in other countries paid lower than 7%. In leisure and education expenses, Turkey remained the highest proportion with 4%. Other countries like Ireland, Italy, Spain and Sweden spent a range of 1% to 3. 5%. In summary, Turkish consumers splurged the most for the given items in 2002, however, Swedish had the lowest spending.
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the data about the percentage of
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spent
on
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different
items in 5 nations such as Ireland, Italy, Spain, Sweden and Turkey in 2002.

Overall
, it is obvious from the table that the surveyed
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countries
allocated most of their
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money
for food, drink and tobacco and
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spent
the least
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money
on leisure and education.
Moreover
, Turkey had the highest proportion of the
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money
paid for the three categories in question.

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First of all
, Turkey was the
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country
where citizens
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spent
most of their
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money
on food, drinks and tobacco, about 32. 2%. The figure for Turkey
was followed
by Ireland which
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spent
around 29%, whereas the figures for other
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countries
were lower than 20%.

Turning to the expenditure on clothing and footwear,
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people
in Italy appeared to be the citizens who allocated most of their
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money
for this category, with 9%, while
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people
in other
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countries
paid lower than 7%. In leisure and education expenses, Turkey remained the highest proportion with 4%. Other
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countries
like Ireland, Italy, Spain and Sweden
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spent
a range of 1% to 3. 5%.

In summary, Turkish consumers splurged the most for the
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given
items in 2002,
however
, Swedish had the lowest spending.
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