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The table shows proportion of pupils attending four different secondary schools from 2000 to 2009

The table shows proportion of pupils attending four different secondary schools from 2000 to 2009 lRnb9
The table illustrates the percentage of school children attending four different types of secondary school from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that the specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled schools experienced declines in numbers of pupils, whereas the community schools became the most important providers of secondary school education during the same period. To begin, the proportion in voluntary-controlled schools fell from just over half to only 20% or one fifth from 2000 to 2009. Similarly, the relative number of children in grammar schools -- just under one quarter -- dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist schools, the relatively small percentage of pupils attending this type of school (12%) also fell, although not significantly. However, while the other three types of school declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community schools. In fact, while only a small minority of 12% were educated in these schools in 2000, this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.
The table illustrates the percentage of
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children attending four
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types of secondary
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from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that the specialist, grammar and voluntary-controlled
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experienced declines in numbers of pupils, whereas the community
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became the most
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providers of secondary
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education during the same period.

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, the proportion in voluntary-controlled
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fell from
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20% or one fifth from 2000 to 2009.
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under one quarter -- dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist
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, the
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percentage of pupils attending this type of
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(12%)
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declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community
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in 2000, this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.
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