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The table shows how people in different country commuted to work in 2010

The table shows how people in different country commuted to work in 2010 a7Apw
The pie chart compares and contrasts data on the percentage of people using vehicles to work in three different nations in 2010. Overall, it can be seen clearly that most people commuted to work by car in triple countries. While fewest people went to their company on foot in Vietnam and Cambodia, Thailand people used the bus least in order to commute. In terms of car, the proportion of users in Vietnam and Cambodia was nearly the same, at around 40%, which was higher than that in Thailand, at 34%. The percentage of Thailand citizens commuting by motorbike accounted for a third of the total. Whereas this was higher than in Vietnam and Cambodia, at 29% and 23% respectively. Regarding bus, Vietnam and Cambodia also had the same amount of people using to work, at 26%, whereas there are 15% of people in Thailand moving. The rate of citizens in Thailand commuted by feet made up a fifth of the total, at 19%, which was much higher than that in Vietnam, at only 4%.
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commuted to work by car in triple countries. While fewest
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on foot in Vietnam and Cambodia, Thailand
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the bus least in order to commute.

In terms of car, the proportion of users in Vietnam and Cambodia was
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the same, at around 40%, which was higher than that in Thailand, at 34%. The percentage of Thailand citizens commuting by motorbike accounted for a third of the total. Whereas this was higher than in Vietnam and Cambodia, at 29% and 23%
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using to work, at 26%, whereas there are 15% of
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in Thailand moving. The rate of citizens in Thailand commuted by feet made up a fifth of the total, at 19%, which was much higher than that in Vietnam, at
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