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The table reveals statistics the numbers and the percentage of international tourists who arrived in 9 countries over a 2-year period.

The table reveals statistics the numbers and the percentage of international tourists who arrived in 9 countries over a 2-year period. w7mNr
The table reveals statistics the numbers and the percentage of international tourists who arrived in 9 countries over a 2-year period. Overall, it is clear that the number of international tourist arrivals increased in most countries. Moreover, the highest figure increase was in Germany. As indicated in the chart, in 2009 and 2010, there was a number of international tourists who visited France, accounting for 76, 000, compared with figures of 66, 000 who visited the USA in 2009, rising to 67, 000 in 2010. These figures were significantly higher than tourist arrivals in Spain and the UK. Both of these countries received 55, 000 international visitors in 2009, increasing to 56, 000 and 57, 000 respectively in the same period. There was also a slight increase in the figures of Italy, from 44, 000 in 2009 to 45, 000 in 2010. However, although the numbers were lower, international tourist arrivals in Turkey, China and Germany all showed a remarkable upward trend over this period. In contrast, the figures of Hong Kong decreased by 10, 000 to 9, 000 between these years. Another noticeable feature is that although the statistics of all the countries experienced a rise in the percentage of international tourist arrivals, except for France, where there was no change, and Hong Kong where the figures show a decline of 11 percent between the two years.
The table reveals statistics the
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and the percentage of
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tourists
who arrived in 9
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countries
over a 2-year period.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the
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of
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tourist
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arrivals
increased in most
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countries
.
Moreover
, the highest
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figure
increase was in Germany.

As indicated in the chart, in 2009 and 2010, there was a
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number
of
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international
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tourists
who visited France, accounting for 76, 000, compared with
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figures
of 66, 000 who visited the USA in 2009, rising to 67, 000 in 2010. These
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figures
were
significantly
higher than
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tourist
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arrivals
in Spain and the UK. Both of these
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countries
received 55, 000
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international
visitors in 2009, increasing to 56, 000 and 57, 000
respectively
in the same period.

There was
also
a slight increase in the
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figures
of Italy, from 44, 000 in 2009 to 45, 000 in 2010.
However
, although the
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numbers
were lower,
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international
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tourist
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arrivals
in Turkey, China and Germany all
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showed
a remarkable upward trend over this period.
In contrast
, the
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figures
of Hong Kong decreased by 10, 000 to 9, 000 between these years.

Another noticeable feature is that although the statistics of all the
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countries
experienced a rise in the percentage of
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international
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tourist
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arrivals
,
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France, where there was no
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, and Hong Kong where the
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a decline of 11 percent between the two years.
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