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The table illustrates the proportion of 5 sectors relating to domestic policy spent by the Government in three countries (Germany, Italy, UK)in 2009.

The table illustrates the proportion of 5 sectors relating to domestic policy spent by the Government in three countries (Germany, Italy, UK)in 2009. PRwoJ
The table illustrates the proportion of 5 sectors relating to domestic policy spent by the Government in three countries (Germany, Italy, UK)in 2009. Generally, it is clear that all three nations both improved health services the most, while the environmental protection section is the less. The figure for economic affairs of the three countries was nearly the same. Apart from the UK, the percentage of public services was quite high. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the highest concern of Government on the countries was health, which reaching smaller or equal to 7. 5%, although there were slightly more from the UK than the other two. Compared to environmental protection, this section accounted for the less in the whole table, just under or equal to 1% in all three countries. In Germany and Italy, public services had a quite high concern from the Government, which the figure for Italy is higher than the another by 2%, reaching 8. 6% in total. In these nations, the shares of economic affairs and education were merely equal each other, both two sections in Italy and Germany represented at around 4. 3%. In terms of the UK, the economic affairs and public services sections seemed to be the same, which these categories each accounting for an average of about 4. 5%. Education is the second highest part in this country, hitting a high of 6. 4% in 2009.
The table illustrates the proportion of 5 sectors relating to domestic policy spent by the
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in three
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(Germany, Italy, UK)in 2009.

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clear
that all three nations both
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improved
health
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the most, while the environmental protection
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section
is the less. The figure for economic affairs of the three
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countries
was
nearly
the same. Apart from the UK, the percentage of public
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services
was quite high.

Looking at the graph more
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, one can
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see
that the highest concern of
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Government
on the
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was health, which reaching smaller or equal to 7. 5%, although there were
slightly
more from the UK than the other two. Compared to environmental protection, this
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section
accounted for the less in the whole table,
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just
under or equal to 1% in all three
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countries
. In Germany and Italy, public
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services
had a quite high concern from the
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, which the figure for Italy is higher than the another by 2%, reaching 8. 6% in total. In these nations, the shares of economic affairs and education were
merely
equal each other, both two
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sections
in Italy and Germany represented at around 4. 3%.

In terms of the UK, the economic affairs and public
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services
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seemed to be the same, which these categories each accounting for an average of about 4. 5%. Education is the second highest part in this
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, hitting a high of 6. 4% in 2009.
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the proportion of 5 sectors relating to domestic policy spent by the Government in three countries (Germany, Italy, UK)in 2009.

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