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The bar chart illustrates how many Japanese tourists traveled abroad over a 10-year period, while the line graph indicates the percentage of these tourists choosing Australia as their destination.

The bar chart illustrates how many Japanese tourists traveled abroad over a 10-year period, while the line graph indicates the percentage of these tourists choosing Australia as their destination. It is clear that there is a gradual rise in the number of Japanese going abroad during the given period, and that Australia increased its share in the Japanese tourist market over the same period. According to the bar chart, Japan saw a steady increase in the number of its overseas travelers, rising from approximately 5 million in 1985 to around 11 million in 1990. Then there was a slight increase in the figure in 1991 to under 11 million, followed by a rise to just below 12 million in 1992. The trend remained almost unchanged until 1993. Afterwards, the figure rose by 3 million for the rest of the period. Before 1985, Australia was the tourist destination for under 2 per cent of Japanese tourists. The trend increased dramatically from 2 per cent in 1985 to around 4. 7 per cent in 1988. The proportion of Japanese traveling to Australia witnessed a fall to about 4. 2 per cent in 1989. Since then there was a gradual increase to more than 6 per cent in 1994. Till 1995, Australia's share from the Japanese tourist market again experienced a slight fall to 6 per cent.

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 Japanese You use this word too often, consider replacing it withvisitorsightseertraveler
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 choosing Australia as their destination. It is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
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 market over the same period.

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 in 1992. The trend remained almost unchanged until 1993. Afterwards, the figure rose by 3 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withthousandtrillionmuchlottotalsum
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