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The table illustates how the registered of five different kinds of transports Australian used had changed in three years 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table illustates how the registered of five different kinds of transports Australian used had changed in three years 2010, 2012 and 2014. yDnwJ
The table illustates how the registered of five different kinds of transports Australian used had changed in three years 2010, 2012 and 2014. Overall, the number of all vehicles shared the same upward trend through years. Although registrered motocrycles saw the most dramatically growth, the total of passenger vehicles by far was the highest in all three year even though it accounted for nearly half of the growth. In 2010, 11 million passengers vehicles were registered while the number for commercial ones was signigicantly lower, about 2. 3 million. Over the following four years, the figure of passenger vehicles increased by 18 percent to 13 million, whereas there was an increase of 17, 4 percent in the sum of commercial vehicles, reached 2. 7 million in 2014. Regarding to other types of transport, over the period, the remarkable rose was recorded for motocycles, which went from 540, 000 in 2010 to 702, 000 in 2014, a rise of 30 percent. Moreover, Autralia witnessed a slightly growth of trucks registered over the measured period, to be specific, heavy trucks rose by 8 percent from 345, 000 to 372, 0000 and light trucks rose by 17 percent from 106, 000 to 124, 000.
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In 2010, 11
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passengers
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to 13
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in the sum of commercial
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vehicles
, reached 2. 7
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in 2014.

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other types of transport, over the period, the remarkable rose
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from 345, 000 to 372, 0000 and light trucks rose by 17
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from 106, 000 to 124, 000.

IELTS academic The table illustates how the registered of five different kinds of transports Australian used had changed in three years 2010, 2012 and 2014.

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