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The given graph provided reveals some surprising differences between the consumption of junk food by adolescents in Mauritius during the period from 1985 to 2015.

The given graph provided reveals some surprising differences between the consumption of junk food by adolescents in Mauritius during the period from 1985 to 2015. 5Lg3p
The given graph provided reveals some surprising differences between the consumption of junk food by adolescents in Mauritius during the period from 1985 to 2015. In 1985, the quantity of Pizza consumed in Mauritius was highest, at exactly 60 times per year while the figure for Hamburgers ingestion was significantly lower, at approximately 10 times each year. At the same time, less than 10 times per year of fried chicken consumed by teen in Mauritius. In 2015, the number of Hamburgers which was ingested increased dramatically to more than 70 times per year and became the highest figure in the line graph. There were a remarkable decline to roughly 10 times each year in the consumption of Pizza. By contrast, the year 2015 witnessed a significant growth of fewer than 10 times to just over 60 times per year in the quantity of Fried Chicken consumption by stripling in Mauritius.
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surprising differences between the consumption of junk food by adolescents in Mauritius during the period from 1985 to 2015.

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of fried chicken consumed by teen in Mauritius.

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and became the highest figure in the line graph. There were a remarkable decline to roughly 10
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in the consumption of Pizza. By contrast, the
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2015 witnessed a significant growth of fewer than 10
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in the quantity of Fried Chicken consumption by stripling in Mauritius.
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IELTS academic The given graph provided reveals some surprising differences between the consumption of junk food by adolescents in Mauritius during the period from 1985 to 2015.

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