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The table give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

The given line graph provides how much the tourist information office received the inquiries in single city from over six months in 2011. overall, it can be seen that the largest number of questions was by persons which their figure reached to almost 1900. while the lowest figure was by letter or email. Turning to the detail, in jan 2011, the tourist information office received the highest number of enquiries by telephone then, after two months its number had remained the same at 1000 questions from March to April to be raising in the next two months to reached approximately 1600 enquiries. As for the lowest number in Jan 2011 was obviously for those people who asked personally it was just over 400 and after that it had continued raising until Jun 2011 to reached the peak at almost 1900. In addition letter or email enquiries had noticeable decrease all over the six months to became the least by slightly under 400 questions in Jun 2011.
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in 2011.

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, it can be
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that the largest
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of questions was by persons which their figure reached to almost 1900. while the lowest figure was by letter or email.

Turning to the detail, in jan 2011, the tourist information office received the highest
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of enquiries by telephone then, after two
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its
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had remained the same at 1000 questions from March to April to be raising in the
next
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to reached approximately 1600 enquiries.

As for the lowest
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in Jan 2011 was
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people
who asked
personally
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over 400 and after that it had continued raising until Jun 2011 to reached the peak at almost 1900.
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letter or email enquiries had noticeable decrease all over the six
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months
to became the least by
slightly
under 400 questions in Jun 2011.

IELTS academic The table give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

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