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The table compares the international tourism in 9 countries from 2009 to 2010.

The table compares the international tourism in 9 countries from 2009 to 2010. 5aMPV
The table gives information regarding the percentage of worldwide tourism in nine countries for consecutive years from 2009 to 2010. Overall, it can be clearly seen that France was the most popular touristic place for visitors in the beginning of the research period. By contrast, at the end of the period given France witnessed no change, remaining its dominance. Looking at the chart in more detail, in 2009 76 per cent of tourists visited from many parts of the world to France, which was the biggest contribution among nine countries and remained the same by the year 2010. By contrast, although the least proportion of people visited to Germany, accounting for merely 10 per cent in 2009. The figure experienced a rapid upward trend at 24% ascending by 109 per cent in 2010. Turning to the rest, in 2009 only 10 per cent people were attracted internationally to Hong Kong and the category went down by 11%, at 9% in 2010. USA was the second most famous place for travelers, amounting to 66 per cent in 2009 and went up slightly by 1. 5% in 2010.
The table gives information regarding the percentage of worldwide tourism in nine countries for consecutive years from 2009 to 2010.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
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seen
that France was the most popular touristic place for visitors in the beginning of the research period. By contrast, at the
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end
of the period
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given
France witnessed no
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change
, remaining its dominance.

Looking at the chart in more detail, in 2009 76 per cent of tourists visited from
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many
parts of the world to France, which was the biggest contribution among nine countries and remained the same by the year 2010. By contrast, although the least proportion of
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people
visited to Germany, accounting for
merely
10 per cent in 2009. The figure experienced a rapid upward trend at 24% ascending by 109 per cent in 2010.

Turning to the rest, in 2009
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only
10 per cent
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people
were attracted
internationally
to Hong Kong and the category went down by 11%, at 9% in 2010. USA was the second most
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famous
place for travelers, amounting to 66 per cent in 2009 and went up
slightly
by 1. 5% in 2010.
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