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Number of days lost for injury per worker for five different countries

Number of days lost for injury per worker for five different countries 0EY23
Number of days lost for injury per worker vary from country to country. Between the time interval of 2001-2005 maximum number of days lost are ten and it is for China and minimum for Germany which is less than 2. 5 days, same for America and Korea. between the time interval of 1996-2000, it is maximum for China whose range is between 7. 5-10days, minimum for Germany whose range is slightly higher than 2. 5 days and same for America and Korea and it is between 2. 5-5days. for the time interval of 1991-2005, it is maximum as well as same for China and Brazil whose range lies between 5-7. 5days and same for two countries named as Germany and Korea lies slightly above 2. 5days and it is minimum for America whose range is slightly below the Germany and Korea. for Germany all the three interval's average is very low and very productive in work and it is very higher for China so it decrease the productivity
Number of days lost for injury per worker vary from country to country. Between the time interval of 2001-2005 maximum number of days lost are ten and it is for China and minimum for Germany which is less than 2. 5 days, same for America and Korea.
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is between 7. 5-10days, minimum for Germany whose
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higher than 2. 5 days and same for America and Korea and it is between 2. 5-5days.
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the time interval of 1991-2005, it is maximum
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lies between 5-7. 5days and same for two countries named as Germany and Korea lies
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IELTS academic Number of days lost for injury per worker for five different countries

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