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The maps illustrate the developments made to a town over a period of 34 years , between 1967 and 2001.

The maps illustrate the developments made to a town over a period of 34 years, between 1967 and 2001. lL0O1
Overall, it is clearly that the city underwent drastic changes and added car park, tennis court, apartments, private and public beaches. In 1967, there was some farmland. In addition there were dunes in the southwest corner, a hotels near to dunes. By sea in the south, there was fish market. There were shops on side of the high street. By 2001, the town had changed some positions. Firstly, shops area left of the high street and right part of shop replaced by apartments. The whole farmland collapsed and turn to swimming pool. We can see on the left side addition of a huge car park and wind turbines below it. Fish market and marina has gone, instead of them created private and public beaches. However, the cafe and golf course were stable.
Overall
, it is
clearly
that the city underwent drastic
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changes
and
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added
car park, tennis court, apartments, private and public beaches.

In 1967, there was
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some
farmland. In
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addition
there were dunes in the southwest corner,
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a hotels
near to dunes. By sea in the south, there was fish market. There were shops on side of the high street.

By 2001, the town had
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changed
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some
positions.
Firstly
, shops area
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left
of the high street and right part of shop replaced by apartments. The whole farmland collapsed and turn to swimming pool. We can
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see
on the
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left
side addition of a huge car park and wind turbines below it. Fish market and marina has gone,
instead
of them created private and public beaches.
However
, the
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cafe
and golf course were stable.
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IELTS academic The maps illustrate the developments made to a town over a period of 34 years, between 1967 and 2001.

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