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The table charts shows department and online stores in 2011.

The table charts shows department and online stores in 2011. mLQaK

The ostensible table chart details the four kind of information regarding department and online stores which were situated in Australia, during the year of 2011. Having a clear glance, it can be seen that the highest number of organizations were involved in teleshopping centre with 368 figure, On the contrary that was merely 67 in chain reserve. Whereas, there was a considerable difference in between the both purchasing sections growth because both were stood at 4% and 6% respectively, in the single the year of 2011. Turning to the remaining information, the most striking feature can be observed in the sales income with just 700 rupees difference. The selling of department stores was12, 700 and that was uplifted by 700 for online stock(13, 400). 807 profit was accounted for mini- mart but that was higher for cybershopping with 863 figure. Looking from an overall perspective, it can is readily apparent that in all given aspects the popularity of electronic shopping was much higher than its counterpart.

The ostensible table chart This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
 the four kind of information regarding department and online stores which were situated
 in Australia, during the year of 2011.

Having a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 glance, it can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 that the highest number of organizations were involved
 in Possible spelling mistake found.telescoping
teleshopping
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
 with 368 Possible agreement error. The noun 'figure' seems to be countable, so consider using: "figures".figures
figure
, On the contrary
 that was merely
 67 in chain reserve. Whereas, there was a considerable difference in between the both purchasing sections growth This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 both were stood
 at 4% and 6% respectively
, in the single the year of 2011.

Turning to the remaining information, the most striking feature can be observed
 in the sales income with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 700 rupees difference. The selling of department stores was12, 700 and that was uplifted
 by 700 for online stock(13, 400). 807 profit was accounted
 for mini- mart This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 that was higher for Possible spelling mistake found.
cybershopping
 with 863 Possible agreement error. The noun 'figure' seems to be countable, so consider using: "figures".figures
figure
.

Looking from an overall
 perspective, It seems that the possessive pronoun "its" fits better in this context. Please verify.its
it
 can is readily
 apparent that in all This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 aspects the popularity of electronic shopping was much higher than its counterpart. 