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The bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by men and women for six different purposes in a particular country

The bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by men and women for six different purposes in a particular country QwepP
The provided bar graph illustrates the number of miles travelled annually for 6 various purposes by females and males. Overview, it is clearly seen from the chart that the both gender miles travelled for work is the maximum, whereas the number of miles travelled for day trip is the least by men and women. According to the graph, 35000 miles travelled for work by men, which is slightly higher than the women. Second popular purposes for travel is the shopping by females, it is 3000 miles. Similarly, the number of miles travelled for taking children to school is the higher by women compare to men. On the contrary, 15000 miles travel for entertainment by men, which is slightly higher than women. The number of miles travelled in a year for day trip by male and female is 1000 and 6000 miles.
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from the chart that the both gender miles
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for work is the maximum, whereas the
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number
of miles
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travelled
for day trip is the least by
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men
and
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. According to the graph,
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35000 miles
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for work by
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men
, which is
slightly
higher than the
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women
. Second popular purposes for travel is the shopping by females, it is
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3000 miles
.
Similarly
, the
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number
of miles
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travelled
for taking children to school is the higher by
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women
compare to
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men
.
On the contrary
,
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15000 miles
travel for entertainment by
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men
, which is
slightly
higher than
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women
. The
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number
of miles
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travelled
in a year for day trip by male and female is 1000 and
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6000 miles
.
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IELTS academic The bar chart below shows the number of miles travelled in a year by men and women for six different purposes in a particular country

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