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The bar graph shows the sales of different types of stationery between 2013 and 2019

The bar graph shows the sales of different types of stationery between 2013 and 2019 XDeQA
The bar chart illustrates the revenue earned from 4 types of stationery, namely pens, pencils, notebooks and envelopes over the course of 6 years starting from 2013. Looking at the chart, it is evident that out of all the categories examined, notebooks registered the highest figure in the chart/ the best-seller throughout the period. Additionally, the sales of all types of stationery experienced an upward tendency with the exception of that of envelopes (=while the proportion of envelopes gradually decreased). At the beginning of the period, the number of pens was about 2 million dollars in sales, compared to the 1 million pencils which was the lowest point in the graph. Additionally, there were more than 10 million dollars of sold notebooks whereas the figure for envelopes was around 7 million dollars. From 2013 to 2019, sales of notebooks witnessed a considerable growth from 11 million dollars to nearly 20 million, an increase of 50%. Similarly, the proportion of pens and pencils surged from under half of 5 million to roughly 13 million. By contrast, the quantity of envelopes steadily dropped from 7 million dollars to nearly 4 million within the same timespan.
The bar chart illustrates the revenue earned from 4 types of stationery,
namely
pens, pencils,
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notebooks
and
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envelopes
over the course of 6 years starting from 2013.

Looking at the chart, it is evident that out of all the categories examined,
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notebooks
registered the highest figure in the chart/ the best-seller throughout the period.
Additionally
, the sales of all types of stationery experienced an upward tendency
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with the exception of
that of
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envelopes
(=while the proportion of
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envelopes
gradually
decreased).

At the beginning of the period, the number of pens was about 2
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million
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dollars
in sales, compared to the 1
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million
pencils which was the lowest point in the graph.
Additionally
, there were more than 10
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million
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dollars
of sold
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notebooks
whereas the figure for
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envelopes
was around 7
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million
dollars.

From 2013 to 2019, sales of
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notebooks
witnessed a considerable growth from 11
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million
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dollars
to
nearly
20
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million
, an increase of 50%.
Similarly
, the proportion of pens and pencils surged from under half of 5
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million
to roughly 13
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million
. By contrast, the quantity of
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envelopes
steadily
dropped from 7
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million
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dollars
to
nearly
4
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million
within the same
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timespan
.
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IELTS academic The bar graph shows the sales of different types of stationery between 2013 and 2019

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