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The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates statistics about market share of computer manufacturing companies in 2006 and 2007. Overall, while the market share of HP, Dell, Toshiba went up during the given period, Acer, Lenova, Simens and others decreased. Turning to the details, being dominant in 2006 with 31. 4%, HP experienced a remarkable rise in manufacturing and maintained its prevalence in 2007 accounting for 34%. Similarly, market share of Dell increased around 4% comprised for 20. 2% in 2007. In comparison with mentioned companies Toshiba grew slightly making up 7. 3% in 2007. On the other hand, market share of Acer went down around 1% to 10. 7% in 2007, meanwhile, despite a slight decrease, Lenova hold roughly 6% of worldwide market share in both years. F/Simens also lost its popularity in the computer market, decreasing from 4. 8% to 2. 3%. Having second biggest market share in 2006 with 22. 8%, “others” saw a significant decline to 19. 3%.
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of computer manufacturing
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, being dominant in 2006 with 31. 4%, HP experienced a remarkable rise in manufacturing and maintained its prevalence in 2007 accounting for 34%.
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of Dell increased around 4% comprised for 20. 2% in 2007.
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of Acer went down around 1% to 10. 7% in 2007, meanwhile, despite a slight decrease,
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in both years. F/
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, decreasing from 4. 8% to 2. 3%. Having second biggest
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in 2006 with 22. 8%, “others”
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a significant decline to 19. 3%.
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IELTS academic The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

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