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The Table below shows the results ofa survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged i6 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past i2 months.

The Table below shows the results ofa survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged i6 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past i2 months. 85xQP
The table shows details of participation in a variety of cultural activities over a year, according to the age of the participants. Overall, any performance, which includes dancing, singing, playing musical instruments and acting, had the highest level of participation, with 22% of respondents participating in the previous 12 months. By contrast, computer based activities had the lowest level of participation (6 per cent). People aged between 45 and 74 years old were most likely to undertake any activity to do with crafts (22 per cent), while performances were more likely to be participated in by those aged 16 to 24 (35 per cent). The differences between age groups were particularly marked in the case of visual arts and writing categories, where participation rates were around three times higher for younger people than for the older ones. It is clear from the evidence that age plays a significant role in the popularity of the cultural activities listed.
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in a variety of cultural
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over a year, according to the age of the participants.

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, any performance, which includes dancing, singing, playing musical instruments and acting, had the highest level of
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, with 22% of respondents participating in the previous 12 months. By contrast, computer based
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had the lowest level of
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(6 per cent).

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aged between 45 and 74 years
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were most likely to undertake any
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to do with crafts (22 per cent), while performances were more likely to
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in by those aged 16 to 24 (35 per cent). The differences between age groups were
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marked in the case of visual arts and writing categories, where
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rates were around three times higher for younger
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IELTS academic The Table below shows the results ofa survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged i6 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past i2 months.

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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