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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Nr8Md
To begin with, it is apparent that this chart illustrates the condition regarding the unemployment issue in Australia in the year 2012. firstly, by studying the chart carefully it appears that the line for rural areas is overall descending whereas in urban areas its exactly the opposite with it being ascending in general. Secondlt, it seems that by the end of the year the unemployment rate in both places reaches to approximately 5%. In addition, according to this chart on the second season of the same year the rate for both lines was almost 4%. However, at fall and also at spring its obvious that the rate had the most difference in cities and in country sides with the villiage areas being about 2% in both seasons and the town areas being above 6% in first season and a bit more than 5% on the third. To conclude, it can be obtained from the chart by looking at it as a whole that the digit of unemployment is going to be increasing regarding the future in both areas. Plus, with how the rate is unstaible during all four seasons it can be predicted that this situation can also happen in the following years.
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illustrates the condition regarding the unemployment issue in Australia in the
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2012.

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firstly
, by studying the
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carefully
it appears that the line for rural
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areas
is
overall
descending whereas in urban
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its exactly the opposite with it being ascending
in general
.

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, it seems that by the
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the unemployment
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rate
in both places reaches to approximately 5%.

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, according to this
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chart
on the second
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season
of the same
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the
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rate
for both lines was almost 4%.
However
, at fall and
also
at spring its obvious that the
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rate
had the most difference in cities and in country sides with the
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villiage
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being about 2% in both
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and the town
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areas
being above 6% in
first
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season
and a bit more than 5% on the third.

To conclude
, it can
be obtained
from the
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chart
by looking at it as a whole that the digit of unemployment is going to be increasing regarding the future in both
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areas
. Plus, with how the
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rate
is
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unstaible
during all four
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seasons
it can
be predicted
that this situation can
also
happen in the following years.

IELTS academic The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

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