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The table illustrates the participation of adult Scots in six different cultural activities over a year, based on a survey of 6, 800 individuals.

The table illustrates the participation of adult Scots in six different cultural activities over a year, based on a survey of 6, 800 individuals. g5xG1
The table illustrates the participation of adult Scots in six different cultural activities over a year, based on a survey of 6, 800 individuals. The data is given in percentages for 3 different age groups as well as all age groups combined, starting at age 16. It can be seen that young adults were most likely to spend their time engaging in creative activities such as visual arts (30%), and performance arts including singing, dancing, playing music and acting (35%). In contrast, the oldest age group had a participation rate of only 11% and 17% in the respective activities. However, this same age group was also most likely to undertake any crafts (22%), which is double the rate for the young adults (11%), and make the most cultural purchases (18%). Overall, when all ages are combined, it is obvious that performance art and crafts were the most popular choices, at 22% and 19% respectively. Computer-based activities were the least frequented both in individual age groups and for the overall comparison.
The table illustrates the participation of adult Scots in six
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Overall
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, it is obvious that performance art and crafts were the most popular choices, at 22% and 19%
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were the least frequented both in individual
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and for the
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the participation of adult Scots in six different cultural activities over a year, based on a survey of 6, 800 individuals.

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