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The graph below show the number of passanger railway journey made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/05.

The graph below show the number of passanger railway journey made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/05. Wyog0
The line graph depicts the informations regarding the country Great Britain where people do their journey through railway in year 1950 to 2004/05. Describing about national rail network, there was much fluctuations can be seen, in initial year 1000 million of travellers used railway and in next year it was increased upto 1150 million passanger and then, it had been continuously falling in trend using railway for passanger around 650 million in year 1980 and then after throughout the period it was again boost nearly 800 million passanger were travel in 1990/91 and in 2004/05 rose in trend using railway among people as similar as year 1960. Analyzing, about London underground in year 1950, around 700 million tourists were using it and later, in 1980 slightly drop using railway by passanger about 500 million, after a year, in 1990/91 rapid growth in public were using train nearly 800 million and simultaneously increased till 2004/05 usage of railway among public was slightly below 1000 million. By moving further, light rail and metro system was used after 1960 to 1980 had not much difference was seen, it was used by almost 50 million passanger then slowly elevated of using light rail and metro system throughout the period around 100 million and 200 million traveller in year 1990/91 and 2004/05 respectively. Overall, it can be observed that National rail network and London Underground had the highest number of people to travel through railway; whereas, light rail and metro system used least among tourist to travel.
The line graph depicts the
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informations
regarding the country Great Britain where
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people
do their journey through
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railway
in
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year
1950 to 2004/05.

Describing about national
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rail
network,
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there was much fluctuations
can be
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seen
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year
1000
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million
of
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travellers
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used
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railway
and in
next
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year
it
was increased
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upto
1150
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million
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passanger
and then, it had been
continuously
falling in trend using
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railway
for
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passanger
around 650
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million
in
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year
1980 and then after throughout the period it was again
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nearly
800
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million
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passanger
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travel in 1990/91 and in 2004/05 rose in trend using
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railway
among
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people
as similar as
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1960.

Analyzing, about London underground in
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1950, around 700
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million
tourists were using it and later, in 1980
slightly
drop using
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railway
by
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passanger
about 500
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million
, after a
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, in 1990/91 rapid growth in public were using train
nearly
800
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million
and

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simultaneously
increased till 2004/05 usage of
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railway
among public was
slightly
below 1000
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million
. By moving
further
, light
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rail
and metro system was
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used
after 1960 to 1980 had not much difference was
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seen
, it was
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used
by almost 50
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passanger
then
slowly
elevated of using light
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rail
and metro system throughout the period around 100
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million
and 200
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million
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traveller
in
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1990/91 and 2004/05
respectively
.

Overall
, it can
be observed
that National
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rail
network and London Underground had the highest number of
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people
to travel through
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railway
; whereas, light
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rail
and metro system
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used
least among tourist to travel.

IELTS academic The graph below show the number of passanger railway journey made in Great Britain between 1950 and 2004/05.

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