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The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013. xmV8w
The given bar charts represent the percentages of online selling in New Zealand from 2 different years including year 2003 and 2013. Overall, it can be clearly seen that the interest of users on entertainments and books had increased, whereas people had a slightly decreased attention on travel and clothes. In 2003, traveling become the most attractive topics to online shoppers taking 36%. Followed by entertainments and clothes, which people around 24% and 21% respectively, interested in. The trend tended to have a few book readers since it took just 19% from all participants. By 2013, people tended to have more attention on films and books, which made the proportion alter to 33% and 22% consecutively. Therefore, entertainment took the vast majority of interest. In the meantime, traveling dropped to the second place at 29%. Moreover, dressing fashion got the least percentages at just 16%. In conclusion, it can be noticeable that New Zealander had less interested in travelling and clothing industry over 7 years, while they tended to shop more books and pay more to the touring company.
The
given
bar charts represent the percentages of online selling in New Zealand from 2
different
years including year 2003 and 2013.
Overall
, it can be
clearly
seen
that the interest of users on entertainments and
books
had increased, whereas
people
had a
slightly
decreased attention on travel and clothes.

In 2003, traveling become the most attractive topics to online shoppers taking 36%. Followed by entertainments and clothes, which
people
around 24% and 21%
respectively
, interested in. The trend tended to have a few
book
readers since it took
just
19% from all participants.

By 2013,
people
tended to have more attention on films and
books
, which made the proportion alter to 33% and 22%
consecutively
.
Therefore
, entertainment took the vast majority of interest. In the meantime, traveling dropped to the second place at 29%.
Moreover
, dressing fashion
got
the least percentages at
just
16%.

In conclusion
, it can be noticeable that New
Zealander
had less interested in travelling and clothing industry over 7 years, while they tended to shop more
books
and pay more to the touring
company
.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

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