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The table below shows the percentage of adults age 16 and over who participated in various activities in the four weeks prior to interview in the United Kingdom in 2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage of adults age 16 and over who participated in various activities in the four weeks prior to interview in the United Kingdom in 2002. RNV6p
The table compares data about young people from 16 and over who were joining in different physical activities within a one month period. The table has been made according to the preferences of males and females in the United Kingdom in 2002. Overall, it is apparent that men were more involved in physical activities, while women liked to do exercise for fitness. On the other hand (First of all), the most popular activity among both genders is (was) walking. approximately the percentage of men and women were interested (49 % and 41%). (The approximate percentages of men and women who were interested in the activity were 49% and 41%). The less popular activities between (among) females were football, also they enjoyed less cycling and weight training, which was around 6% less than men. However, fewer males than females preferred to go swimming and to do yoga activities. On the other hand, The proportion from males who were interested in cues sports (eg. billiards) was five times bigger than the opposite gender.
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from 16 and over who were joining in
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physical
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period. The table has
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men
were more involved in physical
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, while women liked to do exercise for fitness.

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), the most popular
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among both genders is (was) walking.
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approximately
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men
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(49 % and 41%). (The approximate percentages of
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men
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were 49% and 41%). The less popular
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between (among) females were football,
also
they enjoyed less cycling and weight training, which was around 6% less than
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men
.

However
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, The proportion from males who
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in cues sports (
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billiards) was five times bigger than the opposite gender.

IELTS academic The table below shows the percentage of adults age 16 and over who participated in various activities in the four weeks prior to interview in the United Kingdom in 2002.

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