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The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below

The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below dNbP
The table shows that the figures for imprisonment in the five countries mentioned indicate no overall pattern of increase or decrease. In fact there is considerable fluctuation from country to country. In Great Britain the numbers in prison have increased steadily from 30 000 in 1930 to 80, 000 in 1980. On the other hand in Australia, and particularly in New Zealand the numbers fell markedly from 1930 to 1940. Since then they have increased gradually, apart from in 1980 when the numbers in prison in New Zealand fell by about 30, 000 from the 1970 total. Canada is the only country in which the numbers in prison have decreased over the period 1930 to 1980, although there have been fluctuations in this trend. The figures for the United States indicate the greatest number of prisoners compared to the other four countries but population size needs to be taken into account in this analysis. The prison population in the United States increased rapidly from 1970 to 1980 and this must be a worrying trend
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that the figures for imprisonment in the five
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countries
mentioned indicate no
overall
pattern of increase or decrease. In fact there is considerable fluctuation from
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country
to country.

In Great Britain the
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numbers
in
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prison
have increased
steadily
from 30 000 in 1930 to 80, 000 in 1980.
On the other hand
in Australia, and
particularly
in New Zealand the
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numbers
fell
markedly
from 1930 to 1940. Since
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have increased
gradually
, apart from in 1980 when the
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numbers
in
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prison
in New Zealand fell by about 30, 000 from the 1970 total. Canada is the
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only
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in which the
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numbers
in
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prison
have decreased over the period 1930 to 1980, although there have been fluctuations in this trend. The figures for the United States indicate the greatest
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number
of prisoners compared to the other four
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countries
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but
population size needs to
be taken
into account in this analysis. The
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prison
population in the United States increased
rapidly
from 1970 to 1980 and this
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must
be a worrying
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trend
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IELTS academic The table below shows the figures for imprisonment in five countries between 1930 and 1980. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below

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