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The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc.) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.

The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983. g3ea
The table presents the percentage of British homes with common household appliances owned by people in the years 1972-1983. Overall, there has been an increase in durables throughout the decade with most significantly in telephone and central heating ownership. The television and vacuum cleaners seem to be rather stagnant and already present in most households. The statistics also include newer technical items like video and dishwasher. The biggest increase can be observed in the number of houses with telephones with the rise from 42% in 1972 to approximately three quarters in 1983. The central heating also has a notable growth, where it has roughly doubled throughout the decade. The television has slight increase through the years and analogical situation happened with vacuum cleaners, both have tiny a fraction of elevation. The dishwasher appears halfway through the decade but still shows modest increase. The video has only been present in the last year, while already being owned by nearly one fifth of houses.
The table presents the percentage of British homes with common household appliances
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owned
by
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people
in the years 1972-1983.

Overall
, there has been an
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increase
in durables throughout the decade with most
significantly
in telephone and central heating ownership. The television and vacuum cleaners seem to be
rather
stagnant and already present in most households. The statistics
also
include newer technical items like video and dishwasher.

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The
biggest
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increase
can
be observed
in the number of
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houses
with telephones with the rise from 42% in 1972 to approximately three quarters in 1983.
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The
central heating
also
has a notable growth, where it has roughly doubled throughout the decade.

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The
television has slight
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increase
through the years and analogical situation happened with vacuum cleaners, both have tiny a fraction of elevation.

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The
dishwasher appears halfway through the decade
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still
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shows
modest
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increase
.
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The
video has
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only
been present in the last year, while already being
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owned
by
nearly
one fifth of
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IELTS academic The table below shows the consumer durables (telephone, refrigerator, etc. ) owned in Britain from 1972 to 1983.

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6.0
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