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The table below show information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in 3 categories

The table provide proportion of population aged 65 and over in Canada, Germany and United Kingdom in the year 1988, 2000 and estimated year 2030. Overall, Germany had highest percentage compared to other two nations and remain highest continue till 2030. Whereas UK had recorded lowest rate over the period given. Moreover, it is predicted to rise in all three countries from 1986 till 2030. Between 1986 and 2000, Canada and Germany have increased by almost 5%, 20. 67%and 25. 32% respectively. Whereas, British showed slightly change in the proportion of the population aged 65 and above but remain just under 15% in both year. In 2030, it is estimated to rise the population aged 65 and above by around 5. 5%. The percentage is forecast to grow up in Canada by 26. 35%, Germany by 30. 42% and UK by 0. 35%.

The table provide proportion of population aged 65 and over in Canada, Germany and United Kingdom in the year 1988, 2000 and estimated year 2030.

Overall
, Germany had A determiner is probably missing here: “the highest”.the highest
highest
 percentage compared to other two nations and remain highest continue till 2030. “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
 UK had recorded A determiner is probably missing here: “the lowest”.the lowest
lowest
 rate over the period This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
. Moreover
, it is predicted
 to rise in all three countries from 1986 till 2030.

Between 1986 and 2000, Canada and Germany have increased by almost 5%, 20. 67%and 25. 32% respectively
. Whereas, British This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratedportrayedindicateddisplayed
showed
slightly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 in the proportion of the population aged 65 and above This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 remain This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 under 15% in both year.

In 2030, it is estimated
 to rise the population aged 65 and above by around 5. 5%. The percentage is forecast to grow up in Canada Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph.by.by!by?by:by,by;
by


26. 35%, Germany by 30. 42% and UK by 0. 35%. 