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The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London. v.1

The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London. v. 1
The table compares the property rent per week in three areas in London and also shows the required salary to be able to afford to hire these properties. A quick glance at the table reveals that Notting Hill is the most expensive area among the three in terms of its property rent while it is comparatively cheaper to rent an accommodation in Fulham. Now turning back to the details, the weekly rent of one-bed property in Notting Hill is around £375 which increases to £485 for a two bedroom apartment and as high as over £700 for a three-bedroom house. To be able to support the property cost in Notting Hill it is suggested that someone has to earn from around £99, 000 to £195, 000 per annum. The house rent in Regent’s Park starts from £325 for a small house and ends at £650 for a big house. It is clear that the rent in this area is comparatively cheaper than that of Notting Hill and the salary that someone should earn to hire properties in Regent’s Park ranges from roughly £85, 000 to £170, 000. Finally, the property rent in Fulham is the cheapest among the three areas of London which vary from £215 to £600 for a one to three bedroom apartment. The earning requirement to live here also decreased and ranges from £56, 000 to £157, 000 per year.
The table compares the
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property
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rent
per week in three
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areas
in London and
also
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the required salary to be able to afford to hire these
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properties
. A quick glance at the table reveals that Notting
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Hill
is the most expensive
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area
among the three in terms of its
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property
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rent
while it is
comparatively
cheaper to
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rent
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an accommodation
in
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Fulham
.

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Now
turning back to the
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details
, the weekly
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rent
of one-bed
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property
in Notting
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Hill
is around £375 which increases to £485 for a
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two bedroom
apartment and as high as over £700 for a three-bedroom
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house
. To be able to support the
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property
cost in Notting
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Hill
it
is suggested
that someone
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has to
earn from around £99, 000 to £195, 000 per annum. The
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house
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rent
in Regent’s Park
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starts
from £325 for a
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small
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house
and ends at £650 for a
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big
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house
. It is
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clear
that the
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rent
in this
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area
is
comparatively
cheaper than that of Notting
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Hill
and the salary that someone should earn to hire
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properties
in Regent’s Park ranges from roughly £85, 000 to £170, 000.
Finally
, the
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property
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rent
in
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Fulham
is the cheapest among the three
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areas
of London which vary from £215 to £600 for a one to
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three bedroom
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apartment
. The earning requirement to
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live
here
also
decreased and ranges from £56, 000 to £157, 000 per year.
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS academic The table below provides information on rental charges and salaries in three areas of London. v. 1

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
233 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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