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The table below gives information about the key characteristics of visitos to New Zealand for the month of September in 2012 and 2016.

The table below gives information about the key characteristics of visitos to New Zealand for the month of September in 2012 and 2016. ndNxe

The tabular data illustrates the number of Travellers to New Zealand according to main five purpose of visit and by three distinct age groups in the month of September of two years 2012 and 2016. To start with, about 1, 79, 069 and 2, 45, 089 visitors visited the country of New Zealand in 2012 and 2016, respectively. Firstly, by main characteristics of visit, holiday places first rank with tourist around 80, 000 in 2012 and around and 1. 25 lakh in 2016. Followed by the people, who visited their friends and relatives there with almost 0. 125 million in total for both the years. However third in place is businessperson personals with almost 20000 a month in both annums. Similarly the common data for 2012 and 2016 can be observed for conference and conventional mean with 6, 000 attenders in each year. Lastly, for education aspect, 3000 and 4000 student were came across the nation in subsequent years. Secondly, by the age groups, digits of children under 15 years around 20000 for the more older person more than 65 years were same as children in 2016, but for 2012, number decreased to 30200. Finally, 30720 adults, between age group of 35 to 44 traveled in year 2012. While, one third likely to added more(40, 192) in the given following time period. Overall, in context of the age, majority of travellers were neither young nor older, but lies between. To add further, holidays attracted highest number of backpackers among all other activities. Also, the trend of more visitors in 2016 compared to 2012 observed.

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