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The supplied pie charts compare electricity production by fuel resourse in Australia and France over the period of twenty years and it is measured in units.

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The supplied pie charts compare electricity production by fuel resourse in Australia and France over the period of twenty years and it is measured in units. It is obvious from the figure that, electricity taken by source of coal was in the highest proportion in Australia from 1980 onwards 2005, whereas nuclear power was the main source of electricity in France in 2000. A closer look at the data reveals that, the bulk of total production whose outputwas 100 units, came from coal, at 50 units. In France the total output of production was lower in 1980, at 90units and in contrast to Australia coal accounted just for 25 units. However, coal was one of the higher sources together with natural gas in the amount of total production. Moving on the year of 2000, coal continued to be the basic resource for electricity in Australia, at 130 units, whereas the fraction for hydro power was quite lower, at 36units. The situation was very distinctive in France, where total production was higher, at 180units. In detail, nuclear power made up 126 units of total amount, whereas coal and oil accounted for the same numbers, at 25 units.
The supplied pie charts compare electricity
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resourse
in Australia and

France over the period of twenty years and it
is measured
in units.

It is obvious from the figure that, electricity taken by source of coal was in the highest

proportion in Australia
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from 1980 onwards 2005
, whereas nuclear power was the main source of

electricity in France in 2000.

A closer look at the data reveals that, the bulk of
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total
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production
whose
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outputwas
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100 units
, came from coal, at 50
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units
. In France the
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total
output of
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production
was lower in 1980, at

90units and
in contrast
to Australia coal accounted
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just
for 25
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units
.
However
, coal was one of

the higher sources together with natural gas in the amount of
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total
production.

Moving on the year of 2000, coal continued to be the basic resource for electricity in

Australia, at 130
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units
, whereas the fraction for
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hydro power
was quite lower, at
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36units
. The

situation was
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very
distinctive in France, where
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total
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production
was higher, at
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180units
. In

detail, nuclear power made up 126
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units
of
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total
amount, whereas coal and oil accounted for the

same numbers, at 25
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units
.
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