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The supplied two bar graphs depict the percentage of computer belongings in a community.

The supplied two bar graphs depict the percentage of computer belongings in a community. R01bP
The bar chart provides information about computer ownership population between year 2002 to 2010 and percentages by education level who owned computers by year 2002 and 2010. Overall, there were continuous rise in number of computer ownership as well to percentages of computer ownership by education level. It also clear that postgraduate qualification had been the highest in the year 2002 and 2010. In comparison to those with no high school diplomas had been recorded the lowest in year 2002 and 2010. It has been recorded that there was considerably increase of roughly 5% every two years in the number of computer ownership and percentages of population from year 2002 to 2010. Among the population who owned computers it has been recorded that in year 2010 being the highest in percentages which is about 70%, in comparison in year 2002 been the lowest reaching approximately 55%. Record shown that postgraduate’s qualification had been the highest percentages in both year 2002 and 2010, and it has been recorded that those in percentages with no high school diplomas was the lowest in year 2002 and 2010. Postgraduate qualification and Bachelor’s Degree have 5% variation in increased likewise in year 2002 and 2010 followed by those belongs to College incomplete, High school Graduate and with no high school diploma also have uniformed pattern of increase of 20% in both year 2002 and 2010.
The bar chart provides information about computer
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ownership
population between
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year
2002 to 2010 and
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percentages
by education level who
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owned
computers by
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year
2002 and 2010.

Overall
, there were continuous rise in number of computer
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ownership
as well
to
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percentages
of computer
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ownership
by education level. It
also
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clear
that postgraduate qualification had been the highest in the
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year
2002 and 2010.
In comparison
to those with no
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high
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school
diplomas had been
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recorded
the lowest in
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year
2002 and 2010.

It has been
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recorded
that there was
considerably
increase of roughly 5% every two years in the number of computer
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ownership
and
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percentages
of population from
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year
2002 to 2010. Among the population who
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owned
computers it has been
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recorded
that in
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year
2010 being the highest in
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percentages
which is about 70%,
in comparison
in
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year
2002 been the lowest reaching approximately 55%.

Record shown that postgraduate’s qualification had been the highest
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percentages
in both
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year
2002 and 2010, and it has been
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recorded
that those in
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percentages
with no
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high
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school
diplomas was the lowest in
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year
2002 and 2010. Postgraduate qualification and Bachelor’s Degree have 5% variation in increased
likewise
in
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year
2002 and 2010 followed by
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those belongs
to College incomplete,
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High
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school
Graduate and with no
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high
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school
diploma
also
have uniformed pattern of increase of 20% in both
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year
2002 and 2010.
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IELTS academic The supplied two bar graphs depict the percentage of computer belongings in a community.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
230 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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