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The graph shows the income of four restaurants in Cambridge in 2016.

The graph shows the income of four restaurants in Cambridge in 2016. KGd26
The graph illustrates the earnings made by 4 restaurants in 2016 in Cambridge. The Pizza House, Old Hall and Taj Mahal saw increased profits by the end of the year whereas the Grosvenor saw greatly reduced profits over the period. The Pizza House, Old Hall and Taj Mahal, increased their profits over the year. The Pizza House started the period at only £50, 000, but profits doubled by July. Over the next two months profits declined from 100, 000 to £60, 000. From September, profits rose very rapidly so that in December they stood at £190, 000. The Taj Mahal, which started the year as the weakest performing café of the group at only £30, 000 earnings in January, also saw a rapid increase in profits from September onwards to £120, 000 by the end of the year. The Old Hall started and finished the year as the second most successful restaurant of the group and its profits increased overall. Profits in January were £100, 000 and this dipped but then increased by £40, 000 to £140, 000 by the last month of the year. The Grosvenor started the year with the highest income of the four restaurants at £160, 000 a month, but by the end of the year, this figure had dropped by £110, 000 to around £50, 000 a month, so that the Grosvenor was the worst performing café at the year’s end.
The graph illustrates the earnings made by 4 restaurants in 2016 in Cambridge. The Pizza
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that in December they stood at £190, 000. The Taj Mahal, which
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as the weakest performing café of the group at
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with the highest income of the four restaurants at £160, 000 a
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