Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

The rendered bar chart delineates the information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in six regions of the world in three different years 1950, 2007 and 2050.

The rendered bar chart delineates the information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in six regions of the world in three different years 1950, 2007 and 2050. 702mb
The rendered bar chart delineates the information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in six regions of the world in three different years 1950, 2007 and 2050. From the overview, Africa had a lowest percentage of population compare to other five regions, however, North America has highest one. After having a keen observation of the given data it is vivid that, In Asia, In 1950, 15% people was loving in urban area which increased to 41% in 2007 and expected that it will rise to 66% in future. Moreover, In Europe, 51% people was living in cities in 1950, whereas, In 2007 and 2050 it was 37% and 62% respectively. In Europe, 21% rise showed in percentage in 2007 as compared to 1950(51%) and it will b rise to 84% in 2050. Probing further, In 1950, 42%, 62%, 64% population lived in urban areas in Latin America/Caribbean, Oceania, North America orderly. In addition, the population of 2007 in these three regions ranged between 70% and 80%. However, In 2050, it will be excepted to 76% in Oceania, 89% in Latin America/Caribbean and 90% in North America.
The rendered bar chart delineates the information about the percentage of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
living in urban areas in six regions of the world in three
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
years 1950, 2007 and 2050.

From the overview, Africa had
Use "the" with the superlative.
a
lowest percentage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
compare to other five regions,
however
, North America has
A determiner is probably missing here: "the highest".
highest
one.

After having a keen observation of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
data it is vivid that, In Asia, In 1950, 15%
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
The verb 'loving' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
was loving
in urban area which increased to 41% in 2007 and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
that it will rise to 66%
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
.
Moreover
, In Europe, 51%
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
was living in cities in 1950, whereas, In 2007 and 2050 it was 37% and 62%
respectively
. In Europe, 21% rise
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
in percentage in 2007 as compared to 1950(51%) and it will b rise to 84% in 2050.

Probing
further
, In 1950, 42%, 62%, 64%
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
in urban areas in Latin America/Caribbean, Oceania, North America orderly.
In addition
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
population
of 2007 in these three regions ranged between 70% and 80%.
However
, In 2050, it will
be excepted
to 76% in Oceania, 89% in Latin America/Caribbean and 90% in North America.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic The rendered bar chart delineates the information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in six regions of the world in three different years 1950, 2007 and 2050.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
190 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • The rendered bar chart delineates the information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in six regions of the world in three different years 1950, 2007 and 2050.