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The given diagram illustrates the process of producing bricks for the building industrial sector.

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The given diagram illustrates the process of producing bricks for the building industrial sector. The process comprises 7 steps. Overall, the process comprises a number steps beginning with digging clay and ending with transfer to customers. In the first step, clay is dug by an excavator to get fuel. After that, it is given to the company to process in a metal grid and placed on a roller. When this stage is done, the clay is mixed with sand and water. Next, it is cut by wire cutter or mold and becomes bricks. After going through 3 steps, they are transferred into a drying oven for about 24-48 hours. Following this, they are given into a kiln with temperature from 200 degree - 980 degree and high temperature from about 870- 1300 degree, respectively. The next step is cooling the chamber for 48-72 hours. Finally, the finished products are packaged and delivered for the shops and customers.
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process
of producing bricks for the building industrial sector. The
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process
comprises 7
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steps
.
Overall
, the
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process
comprises a number
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steps
beginning with digging clay and ending with transfer to customers.

In the
first
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step
, clay
is dug
by an excavator to
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get
fuel. After that, it is
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given
to the
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company
to
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process
in a metal grid and placed on a roller. When this stage
is done
, the clay
is mixed
with sand and water.
Next
, it is
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cut
by wire cutter or mold and becomes bricks.

After going through 3
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steps
, they
are transferred
into a drying oven for about 24-48 hours. Following this, they are
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given
into a kiln with temperature from 200 degree
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-
980 degree and high temperature from about
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870- 1300
degree,
respectively
. The
next
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step
is cooling the chamber for 48-72 hours.
Finally
, the finished products
are packaged
and delivered for the shops and customers.
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IELTS academic The given diagram illustrates the process of producing bricks for the building industrial sector.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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