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The line graph shows information on the number of men and women per 1000 citizens who smoked in Someland between 1960 and 2000.

The line graph shows information on the number of men and women per 1000 citizens who smoked in Someland between 1960 and 2000. N3koq
The line graph shows information on the number of men and women per 1000 citizens who smoked in Someland between 1960 and 2000. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that the number of men smoking has decreased significantly. Incontrast, the proportion of women increased slightly. As we can see, the number of men smoking in Someland in 1960 was the hightest, 600 per 1000. Then, over the next 40 years, from 1960 to 2000, we see the numbers trend down dramatically to 400 per 1000. In terms of women, 1960 was just under 100 per 1000 through 1975 the number tended to increase significantly to over 200, and that was also the year the number of women peaked at 300. From 1975 to 2000, this number decreased slightly and stopped at 200 parts 1000
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per 1000 citizens who smoked in
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Someland
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smoking has decreased
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increased
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Someland
in 1960 was the
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hightest
, 600 per 1000. Then, over the
next
40 years, from 1960 to 2000, we
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trend down
dramatically
to 400 per 1000.

In terms of
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women
, 1960 was
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under 100 per 1000 through 1975 the
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number
tended to increase
significantly
to over 200, and that was
also
the year the
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number
of
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women
peaked at 300. From 1975 to 2000, this
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decreased
slightly
and
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stopped
at 200 parts 1000
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IELTS academic The line graph shows information on the number of men and women per 1000 citizens who smoked in Someland between 1960 and 2000.

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