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The chart below shows the rate of occupancy in the hotels in the USA over 6 months in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the rate of occupancy in the hotels in the USA over 6 months in 2020. wMjwq
The line graph illustrates the percentage of habitancy in the hotels from January to June in 2020. In general, the rate seems to rise in a short period and then fail from the beginning. It can be seen that from January, there was about 50 percent but over one month, it slightly increased to almost 60%. Constantly, there was a significant rise by about 5 percent between February and March. Suddenly, the percentage of occupancy fell dramatically to 20 percent. From April to June experienced a considerable increase of about 20%. In conclusion, there was a tremendous fluctuation in the 6 months given. The figures fell a lot but fortunately it rose again but still lower than the beginning.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of
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habitancy
in the hotels from January to June in 2020.
In general
, the rate seems to rise in a short period and then fail from the beginning.

It can be
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seen
that from January, there was about 50 percent
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but
over one month, it
slightly
increased to almost 60%.
Constantly
, there was a significant rise by about 5 percent between February and March.
Suddenly
, the percentage of occupancy fell
dramatically
to 20 percent. From April to June experienced a considerable increase of about 20%.

In conclusion
, there was a tremendous fluctuation in the 6 months
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given
. The figures fell a lot
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but
fortunately
it rose again
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but
still
lower than the beginning.

IELTS academic The chart below shows the rate of occupancy in the hotels in the USA over 6 months in 2020.

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