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the recent configuration of the center of a city, namely Islip, and how the city will be developed in the future

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The maps represented below display the recent configuration of the center of a city, namely Islip, and how the city will be developed in the future. Currently, this city’s center has only been having limited public facilites. Hence, in order to completing these needs, there will be a number of infrastructures construction in Islip Town. Specifically, based on the first figure, there are two shops which located on the southern of the main road and the other one placed in the northern of that road, respectively. Furthermore, there are two housing complexes which located in the southern of the south shop. Meanwhile, the park location currently is on the eastern of the housing complexes and the school is situated on the south of turning roads which directing into the southern housing. In the future, there will be many changes. In the northern side of the pedestrian way, which formerly became the location of the main road, there will be a bus station, a shopping center, a car park, and a new housing. Moreover, the town center will be surrounded by the new ring road, with double carriageway. The school, subsequently, will be known as the building on the outside of this road, as well as the housing which located in the easter of the school.
The maps represented below display the recent configuration of the center of a city,
namely
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Islip
, and how the city will
be developed
in the future.

Currently
, this city’s center has
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only
been having limited public
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facilites
.
Hence
, in order to
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completing
these needs, there will be a number of infrastructures construction in
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Islip
Town.

Specifically
, based on the
first
figure, there are two shops which located on the southern of the main
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road
and the other one placed in the northern of that
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road
,
respectively
.
Furthermore
, there are two housing complexes which located in the southern of the south shop. Meanwhile, the park location
currently
is on
The phrase 'the eastern of' is not correct. Use a noun, not an adjective, between 'the' and 'of'.
the eastern of
the housing complexes and the school
is situated
on the south of turning
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roads
which directing into the southern housing.

In the future, there will be
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many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
. In the northern side of the pedestrian way, which
formerly
became the location of the main
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road
, there will be a bus station, a shopping center, a car park, and a new housing.
Moreover
, the town center will
be surrounded
by the new ring
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road
, with double carriageway. The school,
subsequently
, will
be known
as the building on the outside of this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
road
,
as well
as the housing which located in the
Use "(easter)" if you mean to express an extreme with this adjective.
easter
of the school.

IELTS academic the recent configuration of the center of a city, namely Islip, and how the city will be developed in the future

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