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The provided the table illustrates the comparison of the IELTS achievement of Germany, French, Indonesian and Malay in 2010.

The provided the table illustrates the comparison of the IELTS achievement of Germany, French, Indonesian and Malay in 2010. 2xlbx
The provided the table illustrates the comparison of the IELTS achievement of Germany, French, Indonesian and Malay in 2010. As a general trend, the German students got the highest score; nevertheless, the lowest band was taken by Indonesian’s students in 2010. As far as German students with the highest score are concerned, they got 6. 9 band at speaking test; however, they got 6. 3 band at reading skill, which was the lowest. Moreover, 6. 8 band was taken in listening, and 6. 6 band was taken in writing. Furthermore, the student’s band scores are fluctuating within 6. 1 to 6. 9 band. It has been observed that it is not the same at skills. As regards with the Indonesian students taken the lowest score, they got 6. 1 band at reading, while they 6. 7 band at speaking. Besides, 6. 3 band was gotten at listening stage, it is asserted that they are most good at reading. Additionally, they are lower by 0. 5 band than German students.
The provided the table illustrates the comparison of the IELTS achievement of Germany, French, Indonesian and Malay in 2010.

As a general trend, the German
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the highest
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;
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was taken
by Indonesian’s
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students
in 2010.

As far as German
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with the highest
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are concerned
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6. 9
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at speaking
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;
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6. 3
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at reading
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, which was the lowest.
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, 6. 8
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band
was taken
in listening, and 6. 6
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band
was taken
in writing.
Furthermore
, the
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student’s
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band
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are fluctuating within 6. 1 to 6. 9
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. It has
been observed
that it is not the same at
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skills
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As regards with the Indonesian
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taken the lowest
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, they
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got
6. 1
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at reading, while they 6. 7
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at speaking.
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, 6. 3
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at reading.
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, they are lower by 0. 5
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than German
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IELTS academic The provided the table illustrates the comparison of the IELTS achievement of Germany, French, Indonesian and Malay in 2010.

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169 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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