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The provided line graph gives information about free time activities of the elderly in the United State in the period of 20 years from 1980 to 2010.

The provided line graph gives information about free time activities of the elderly in the United State in the period of 20 years from 1980 to 2010. 6dKDr
The line graph gives information about 5 different types of leisure activities picked by senior citizens in the United States from 1980 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen that elderly in the US spent the largest amount of time on watching TV, the opposite was true for surfing the internet. Interestingly, senior citizens are inclined to hike more than in the past. At the beginning of the period, the elderline spent the largest amount of time watching TV at 60%, significantly higher than that of surfing the internet, which was 5%. Meanwhile, 50% of their free time is spent on theatre, while those of reading and hiking were lower at 30% and 20% respectively. In 200, the figures for both watching TV and surfing the internet followed the same trend, which increased slightly to 70% and 15% inturn. After that, there was a slow decrease to around 65% in the data of watching TV, whereas a significant rise to 50% was recorded in the proportion of surfing the internet. In addition, only the percentage of hiking witnessed a gradual jump and stopped at 80% at the end of the period. Regarding reading and theatre, in 1990, the data of theatre witnessed a significant drop to 30% before growing to 40% in 2000 and stopped at approximetely 45% in the final year. Meanwhile, there was a slight increase to 40% in the figure for reading and then it declined to roughly 20% in the next 10 years. Finally, a dramatical growth to 60% was seen in this figure.
The line graph gives information about 5
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different
types of leisure activities picked by senior citizens in the United States from 1980 to 2010.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that elderly in the US spent the largest amount of time on watching TV, the opposite was true for surfing the internet.
Interestingly
, senior citizens
are inclined
to hike more than in the past.

At the beginning of the period, the
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elderline
spent the largest amount of time watching TV at 60%,
significantly
higher than that of surfing the internet, which was 5%. Meanwhile, 50% of their free time
is spent
on
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theatre
, while those of reading and hiking were lower at 30% and 20%
respectively
. In 200, the figures for both watching TV and surfing the internet followed the same trend, which increased
slightly
to 70% and 15%
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inturn
. After that, there was a slow decrease to around 65% in the data of watching TV, whereas a significant rise to 50%
was recorded
in the proportion of surfing the internet.
In addition
,
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only
the percentage of hiking witnessed a gradual jump and
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stopped
at 80% at the
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end
of the period.

Regarding reading and
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theatre
, in 1990, the data of
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theatre
witnessed a significant drop to 30%
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before
growing to 40% in 2000 and
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stopped
at
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approximetely
45% in the final year. Meanwhile, there was a slight increase to 40% in the figure for reading and then it declined to roughly 20% in the
next
10 years.
Finally
, a
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dramatical
growth to 60% was
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seen
in this figure.
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IELTS academic The provided line graph gives information about free time activities of the elderly in the United State in the period of 20 years from 1980 to 2010.

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