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The provided graph illustrates the data about the number of people that listen to XYZ radio station from 1940 to 2030

The provided graph illustrates the data about the number of people that listen to XYZ radio station from 1940 to 2030 RNaLW
The given graph illustrates the data about the number of people that listen to XYZ radio station from 1940 with projections to 2030 and is measured in thousand. Overall, despite many fluctuations, it can be seen that the number of listeners rise up in the final year than the early one. According to the graph, the number of listeners to XYZ radio station was nearly 25 thousand in 1940 and it rose up dramatically between 1940 and around 1955 with about 105 thousand listeners. It was the peak point of the whole graph. However, the radio station experienced a noticeable downward trend from 1955 to 1960 with the number about 25 thousand of people that listen to it. Then, the graph increased in a few year and remained stable after that with about 45 thousands listeners to the XYZ radio station. The year 1980 saw the lowest number of listeners and it was nearly 15 thousands of listeners. The graph fluctuated until 2000 and it inclined mildly between 2000 and 2018. Then, the line graph increased and will increase till 2028 and then it will remain steady from 2028 to 2030 with the number about 85 thousands of listeners.
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illustrates the data about the
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number
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people
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radio
station from 1940 with projections to 2030 and
is measured
in
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thousand
.
Overall
, despite
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fluctuations, it can be
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seen
that the
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number
of listeners rise up in the final year than the early one.

According to the
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graph
, the
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number
of listeners to XYZ
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radio
station was
nearly
25 thousand in 1940 and it rose up
dramatically
between 1940 and around 1955 with about 105 thousand listeners. It was the peak point of the whole
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graph
.
However
, the
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radio
station experienced a noticeable downward trend from 1955 to 1960 with the
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number
about 25 thousand of
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people
that listen to it. Then, the
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graph
increased in a
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few year
and remained stable after that with about 45 thousands listeners to the XYZ
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radio
station.

The year 1980
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saw
the lowest
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number
of listeners and it was
nearly
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15 thousands of
listeners. The
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graph
fluctuated until 2000 and it inclined
mildly
between 2000 and 2018. Then, the line
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graph
increased and will increase till 2028 and then it will remain steady from 2028 to 2030 with the
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number
about
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85 thousands of
listeners.

IELTS academic The provided graph illustrates the data about the number of people that listen to XYZ radio station from 1940 to 2030

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