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The provided graph compares the male and female smokers from 1960 to 2000 in Someland

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The provided graph compares the male and female smokers from 1960 to 2000 in Someland Overall, it is obvious that the rate of male smoker decreased over the time while the female smokers’ rate increase in the given period of time. As you can see in the line graph, 600 male in every 1, 000 people were smoking while female smoker were less than 100 in 1960. Over the 40 years, the number of male smoker decreased from 600 to about 250. In contrast, although the number of female smokers is always less than that of male smokers, their numbers still increase over time. After 25 years, the number of male and female smokers in 1985 stood at 400 and a little more than 300, which shows a contrasting trend of smoking between men and women. Finally, in 2000, male smoker around 250 people, a significant reduction from the number of men who smoked initially, while in female it is over 200, which shows that women double in 40 years. Though more males in Someland smoked, the increasing trend of the female smokers was somewhat alarming.
The provided graph compares the male and
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smokers from 1960 to 2000 in
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Someland


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, it is obvious that the rate of male smoker decreased
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over
the time while the
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female
smokers’ rate increase in the
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given
period of time.

As you can
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see
in the line graph, 600 male in every 1, 000
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people
were smoking while
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female
smoker were less than 100 in 1960.
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Over
the 40 years, the
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number
of male smoker decreased from 600 to about 250.
In contrast
, although the
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number
of
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female
smokers is always less than that of male smokers, their
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numbers
still
increase
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over
time. After 25 years, the
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number
of male and
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female
smokers in 1985 stood at 400 and a
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little
more than 300, which
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shows
a contrasting trend of smoking between
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men
and women.
Finally
, in 2000, male smoker around 250
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people
, a significant reduction from the
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number
of
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men
who smoked
initially
, while in
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female
it is
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over
200, which
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shows
that women double in 40 years.

Though more
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males
in
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Someland
smoked, the increasing trend of the
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female
smokers was somewhat alarming.

IELTS academic The provided graph compares the male and female smokers from 1960 to 2000 in Someland

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