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The provided bar line graph illustrates the quantities vehicles, made in japan and Korea from 1980 to 1985

The provided bar line graph illustrates the quantities vehicles, made in japan and Korea from 1980 to 1985 jVY6N
. As a general trend, the quantities of the vehicle manufacturing of Korea up surged exponentially, while there were substaintial upward and downward trends in car production Japan for 15 years. As far as the the quantities of the vehicles in Korea are concerned, it was 400 millions in 1995, which is the highest; in contrast, it used to be sold its lowest a mount of it 100millions in 1980. Furthermore, it is worth noting that car manufactures soared up by slow degrees for 15 years. What is more remarkable difference is that the quantities of the vehicles in 1995 is 300 millions more than of 1980. Fascinatingly, there is no vaciilition over the period. As regards with Japan, they made 500 millions car in 1985, which was their highest; however, they manufactured 100 millions in 1990. Moreover, it is worth noting that it had been collapsing exponentially from 1985 to 1990. Additionally, the most striking difference is that it was 300 millions in 1980; on the contrary, it is yielding 200 millions in 1995. Generally, it has been increasing slightly.
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As a general trend, the quantities of the vehicle manufacturing of Korea up surged
exponentially
, while there were
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substaintial
upward and downward trends in car production Japan for 15 years.

As far as
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the the
quantities of the vehicles in Korea
are concerned
, it was 400
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millions
in 1995, which is the highest;
in contrast
, it
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used
to
be sold
its lowest a mount of it
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100millions
in 1980.
Furthermore
, it is worth noting that car manufactures soared up by slow degrees for 15 years.
What is more
remarkable difference is that the quantities of the vehicles in 1995 is 300
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millions
more than of 1980.
Fascinatingly
, there is no
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vaciilition
over the period.

As regards with Japan, they made 500
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millions
car in 1985, which was their highest;
however
, they manufactured 100
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millions
in 1990.
Moreover
, it is worth noting that it had been collapsing
exponentially
from 1985 to 1990.
Additionally
, the most striking difference is that it was 300
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
millions
in 1980;
on the contrary
, it is yielding 200
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
millions
in 1995.
Generally
, it has been increasing
slightly
.
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IELTS academic The provided bar line graph illustrates the quantities vehicles, made in japan and Korea from 1980 to 1985

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