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The provided bar graph lepait the information about the best loued subject of 60 students from two school school a and school B the data has been calibrated in percantage

The provided bar graph lepait the information about the best loued subject of 60 students from two school school a and school B the data has been calibrated in percantage GwPxo
To Commence with, The school A The sport students ratio was 36% however 5 percent of sports in school B. Moreover, The Social Science favourite subject of school B ratio was 10% Since, The dropped the percanta was 6% from school A. Althrough, The School A student less like subject of science ratio was 9% as compered to the school B not like to science subject percentage was 2%. Furthermore, The give language colume from school A ratio was 5% during the school B percentage was 10%. Movingfurther, Some student like the craft / Drawing subject from school B ratio was 25% in addition to, School A colume show the percentage was 4% Overall, It is clearly see that the highest percentage of school A subject of sport ratio was 36%. Whececas, Least less like school subject was science from school B ratio was 2%.
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IELTS academic The provided bar graph lepait the information about the best loued subject of 60 students from two school school a and school B the data has been calibrated in percantage

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