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THE PROPORTION OF SINGLE-CHILD FAMILIES IN CITIES, OUTSKIRTS AND RURAL AREAS OF CHINA 1980-2000

THE PROPORTION OF SINGLE-CHILD FAMILIES IN CITIES, OUTSKIRTS AND RURAL AREAS OF CHINA 1980-2000 7Wl5X
The provided bar chart illustrates the percentage of single-child families in urban areas, suburbs and countryside of China over a 20-year period, starting from 1980. In general, over the given period, the percentages of only-child family units in three areas experienced an upward trend. There were great differences in the data of single-child families in the countryside compared with those of the other regions. A closer look at the data reveals that the figure for one-offspring families in cities accounted for 50%, as opposed to 40% in suburbs. Meanwhile, the proportion of families having one child in rural areas was only 10% this year. In the next 10 years, the tendency to have only one child in urban areas went up sharply to 95%. This trend continuously increased slightly to a peak of 100% in the final 10 years. Likewise, the percentage of one child family units in the outskirts witnessed a considerable rise during the 1980-2000 period and marked nearly similar quantities with cities, at 100% in 2000. In a similar way, the figure for only-child families in rural areas climbed slowly to 20% throughout the first 10 years, followed by a dramatic rise of 50% in the end of the period.
The provided bar chart illustrates the percentage of single-child
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in urban
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, suburbs and countryside of China over a
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20-year
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, starting from 1980.

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, over the
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, the percentages of
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only
-child
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units in three
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experienced an upward trend. There were great differences in the data of single-child
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families
in the countryside compared with those of the other regions.

A closer look at the data reveals that the figure for one-offspring
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families
in cities accounted for 50%, as opposed to 40% in suburbs. Meanwhile, the proportion of
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families
having one child in rural
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areas
was
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only
10% this year.

In the
next
10 years, the tendency to have
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one child in urban
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went up
sharply
to 95%. This trend
continuously
increased
slightly
to a peak of 100% in the final 10 years.
Likewise
, the percentage of one child
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family
units in the outskirts witnessed a considerable rise during the 1980-2000
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period
and marked
nearly
similar quantities with cities, at 100% in 2000.
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In a similar way
, the figure for
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in rural
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climbed
slowly
to 20% throughout the
first
10 years, followed by a dramatic rise of 50% in the
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end
of the
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.
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IELTS academic THE PROPORTION OF SINGLE-CHILD FAMILIES IN CITIES, OUTSKIRTS AND RURAL AREAS OF CHINA 1980-2000

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  American English
4 paragraphs
203 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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