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the bar chart display the survey result of people's buying and drinking coffee and tea in five australian cities

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The bar chart presents information about the percentage of survey results of people’s habits on buying and drinking coffee and tea in five Australian cities (Sidney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart). Generally, most people in those cities went to café for coffee or tea whereas fewer people bought fresh coffee. Following this data, in Melbourne, the majority of people who went to coffee shops for drinking in the last 4 weeks reached nearly two-third (64%). While Sydney and Hobart were slightly different at approximately 63% and Brisbane just over a half (56%). The last position is Adelaide with almost a half (49%). On the other hand, people who bought instant coffee in the last 4 weeks in the five cities are not more than 55%. Hobart reached the highest percentage with nearly 55%. Following this, Brisbane and Adelaide around a half. The last position, Sydney and Melbourne, is less than a half. Surprisingly, less of people who bought fresh coffee in the last 4 weeks in all of cities with below than 45%. Sydney and Melbourne were a bit different at approximately 43%. The other cities like Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart below 40%.
The bar chart presents information about the percentage of survey results of
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coffee
and tea in five Australian
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cities
(Sidney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart).

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in those
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went to café for
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coffee
or tea whereas fewer
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people
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bought
fresh coffee.

Following this data, in Melbourne, the majority of
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people
who went to
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coffee
shops for drinking in the last 4 weeks reached
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two-third (64%). While Sydney and Hobart were
slightly
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at approximately 63% and Brisbane
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over a half (56%). The last position is Adelaide with almost a half (49%).

On the other hand
,
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people
who
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bought
instant
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coffee
in the last 4 weeks in the five
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cities
are not more than 55%. Hobart reached the highest percentage with
nearly
55%. Following this, Brisbane and Adelaide around a half. The last position, Sydney and Melbourne, is less than a half.

Surprisingly
, less of
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people
who
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bought
fresh
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coffee
in the last 4 weeks in all of
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cities
with below than 45%. Sydney and Melbourne were a bit
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different
at approximately 43%. The other
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like Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart below 40%.
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IELTS academic the bar chart display the survey result of people's buying and drinking coffee and tea in five australian cities

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6.0
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