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The proportion of music sales market between 2011 and 2018 in London.

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The line graph below has demonstrated the rate of music sales between 2011 and 2018 in London. As you can see from the data, there were three different selling methods measured by the line graph. Overall, the numbers changed a lot during these proud of time in both steam selling and CDs buying. However, the selling ratio by download had been slightly up and down during this time. Based on the information provided by the chart, we can see that the streaming method was unknown and very unpopular in 2011, and it was about %5 of the music sales market. However, at that time, most musicians prefer to publish their albums on CDs because most people would like to use this kind of method to listen to their favorite songs, so about %55 of the market sales were dedicated to this method. Also, downloading was around %35 and had gradually gone up and down between this time and with a reduce of percent in 2018 it reached %30 of the music sellings market.
The line graph below has demonstrated the rate of music sales between 2011 and 2018 in London. As you can
see
from the data, there were three
different
selling
methods measured by the line graph.

Overall
, the numbers
changed
a lot during these proud of time in both steam
selling
and CDs buying.
However
, the
selling
ratio by download had been
slightly
up and down during this time.

Based on the information provided by the chart, we can
see
that the streaming method was unknown and
very
unpopular in 2011, and it was about %5 of the music sales market.
However
, at that time, most musicians prefer to publish their albums on CDs
because
most
people
would like to
use
this kind of method to listen to their favorite songs,
so
about %55 of the market sales
were dedicated
to this method.

Also
, downloading was around %35 and had
gradually
gone up and down between this time and with a
reduce
of percent in 2018 it reached %30 of the music
sellings
market.
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