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This bar chart depicts the problems people have when they move to a new country, and how it varies according to age groups. The most problematic issue for people in the middle age group is health care problems (over 34 percent). However, all age groups have trouble sorting out health care in the close percentage, (36 percent in older age groups and 35 percent in younger age group) but the middle age group find it more difficult. The second most difficulties for people age 35 to 54 is money problems with 35 percent. However the percentage of people who find money issue difficult is higher in the middle age groups, but this is the most difficulties for people age 18 to 34 with about 34 percent. The least problem in the middle age group and the highest one among all age groups is school problems. Near to 29 percent of people age 35 to 54 have trouble finding schools for their children, which is the least problematic one in total, in the oldest age group with about 4 percent. In general all age groups face with the same problems in some extent but the middle age group is the group who tackles with problems more in compression of two other groups.
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35 to 54 is money
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with about 4 percent.

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IELTS academic the problems people have when they move to a new country,

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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