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The plans provide information about a public park, the Grange Park at the time of its inauguration in 1920 and its present day condition.

The plans provide information about a public park, the Grange Park at the time of its inauguration in 1920 and its present day condition. nXD7n
The plans provide information about a public park, the Grange Park at the time of its inauguration in 1920 and its present day condition. Overall, the maps demonstrate that the Grange Park has undergone various changes from 1902 to present day. While some new features have been added to the park, some features were changed by shifting their sites. The 1920 map shows, the park could be accessed from the Arnold avenue at North and the Eldon street at south. A large scale fountain at the center of the space dominated the previous drawing. At the left side of the fountain a stage for musicians was located. A pond for water plants occupied the north-east corner of the park. A greenhouse was situated on the right of the south entrance. There were seating arrangements scattered in all sides of the open space. The contemporary map shows that some feature from the past has been replaced by modern day features. For instance, an amphitheater has been built for concert in place of the music stage that was in previous plan. Moreover, the central fountain has been replaced by a square shaped rose garden with seating on all sides. While the north and south gates are kept the same, an additional entrance for underground car parking has been added later. The water body was exchanged for a children play area. While there was no cafeteria facility in the earlier version, one café has been added in the later one. Furthermore, in place of the glasshouse a natural-like water feature has been added.
The plans provide information about a public
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park
, the Grange
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Park
at the time of its inauguration in 1920 and its present day condition.

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, the maps demonstrate that the Grange
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Park
has undergone various
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changes
from 1902 to present day. While
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some
new features have been
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added
to the
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park
,
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some
features were
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changed
by shifting their sites.

The 1920 map
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shows
, the
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park
could
be accessed
from the Arnold avenue at North and the Eldon street at south. A large scale fountain at the center of the space dominated the previous drawing. At the
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left
side of the fountain a stage for musicians
was located
. A pond for water plants occupied the north-east corner of the
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park
. A greenhouse
was situated
on the right of the south entrance. There were seating arrangements scattered in all sides of the open space.

The contemporary map
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shows
that
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some
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feature
from the past has
been replaced
by modern day features.
For instance
, an amphitheater has
been built
for concert in place of the music stage that was in previous plan.
Moreover
, the central fountain has
been replaced
by a square shaped rose garden with seating on all sides. While the north and south gates are
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kept
the same, an additional entrance for underground car parking has been
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added
later. The water body
was exchanged
for a children play area. While there was no cafeteria facility in the earlier version, one café has been
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added
in the later one.
Furthermore
, in place of the glasshouse a natural-like water
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feature
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IELTS academic The plans provide information about a public park, the Grange Park at the time of its inauguration in 1920 and its present day condition.

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