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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. l6GW
The diagram gives information about Garden build up in 1920 and the same development Park today. Overall, lot of addition can be Seen in today grange park, Arnold avenue. First I will talk about 1920 grange park. In these garden there are five seats are available for people sitting into garden. And park was two entrance for entering in Park Moreover Ponds are make for plants i lose garden and fountain Cranee Park Ploulded one glasshouse for seen the graden view. Furthermore, the park was provided one Stage for musicians to performs and give entertainment for people. Also the park had beautiful fountain for refreshments. Second I will talk about tody grange Park. So there are number of Changes in Park like Gufe water feature Car parking and Amphitheater for Gocerts. Rose garden had Set into middle of park and making seats. Also, park allocate some area for Children's play. Grande Park distributes area for making amphitheater for musicians to perform concerts. In addition, the park had underground parking for Cal at the entrance of the park. Entrance are Sume. Compared to 1920 glange park. For Chilling park develop cafe and for attraction Park make making water feature
The diagram gives information about
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build up in 1920 and the same development
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Park
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today
.
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lot of
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today
grange
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park
, Arnold avenue.
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I will talk about 1920 grange
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park
. In these
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garden
there are five seats are available for
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people
sitting into
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garden
. And
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park
was two entrance for entering in
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Park
Moreover
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make
for plants
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i
lose
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garden
and fountain
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Cranee
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Park
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Ploulded
one glasshouse for
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park
was provided
one Stage for musicians to performs and give entertainment for
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.
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park
had
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fountain for refreshments. Second I will talk about
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.
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like
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water feature Car parking and Amphitheater for
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Gocerts
. Rose
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had Set into middle of
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park
and making seats.
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,
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park
allocate
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area for Children's play. Grande
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distributes area for making amphitheater for musicians to perform concerts.
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park
had underground parking for Cal at the entrance of the
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glange
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. For Chilling
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develop
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and for attraction
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make
making water
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feature

IELTS academic The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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