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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

The maps outline the changes that took place in a public park called Grange Park from 1920 to today. Overall, the park was changed and renovated to offer people more possibilities than they used to have decades ago such as a cafe, theatre, playground and parking. In details, the park was opened in 1920 and entertainment facilities including a larger stage and various areas for recreation have since been added to it. There was also notable relocation in terms of seats and the only areas that remained unchanged were the entrances and one minor garden. Besides, the fountain has been removed in favour of a rose garden with full seating arrangements around it. To the left of the new garden, the previous stage for musicians has been turned into a much larger amphitheatre facing the opposite direction that will allow for concerts in the park. This change has necessitated the removal of both seatings on the far left side as well as the rose garden in the bottom left corner of the map.
The maps outline the
changes
that took place in a public
park
called Grange
Park
from 1920 to
today
.

Overall
, the
park
was
changed
and renovated to offer
people
more possibilities than they
used
to have decades ago such as a
cafe
,
theatre
, playground and parking.

In
details
, the
park
was opened
in 1920 and entertainment facilities including a larger stage and various areas for recreation have since been
added
to it. There was
also
notable relocation in terms of seats and the
only
areas that remained unchanged were the entrances and one minor
garden
.
Besides
, the fountain has
been removed
in
favour
of a rose
garden
with full seating arrangements around it. To the
left
of the new
garden
, the previous stage for musicians has
been turned
into a much larger
amphitheatre
facing the opposite direction that will
allow
for concerts in the
park
. This
change
has necessitated the removal of both
seatings on
the far
left
side
as well as
the rose
garden
in the bottom
left
corner of the map.
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IELTS academic The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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