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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Map of a public park when it first opened in 1920 and today

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. LrLl1
The maps outline the changes took place in Grange Park in 1920 as compared to today's design. Overall, many spots in the park were rennovated whereas other areas were kept untouched. Earlier in 1920, the visitors could enter the park through two gateways, namely, Arnold avenue and Eldon street. Seats were provided at the end sides of the park. Three gardens containing bunch of roses were spotted in the park. Glasshouse was located next to Eldon street. According to plan of 1920, the fountain was situated in the centre of the park, whereas, it is replaced by quadrilateral rose garden, along with, seating arrangements on every outer side. Apmhitheatre is introduced into new plan, especially for concerts, where once the area was occupied with musicians on stage. Today's plan changed Pond with water plants into playground for young ones. Water pool with rocks can be found on the right-hand corner of the map, in addition, an entrance underground car park. To lead to a conclusion, the new plan is compact and organised and many variations were carried out except rose gardens and entrances.
The maps outline the
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took place in Grange
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Park
in 1920 as compared to
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today
's design.
Overall
,
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many
spots in the
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park
were
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rennovated
whereas other areas were
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kept
untouched.

Earlier in 1920, the visitors could enter the
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park
through two gateways,
namely
, Arnold avenue and Eldon street. Seats
were provided
at the
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end
sides of the
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park
. Three gardens containing
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bunch of
roses
were spotted
in the
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park
. Glasshouse
was located
next
to Eldon street.

According to
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plan
of 1920, the fountain
was situated
in the
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centre
of the
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park
, whereas, it
is replaced
by quadrilateral rose garden, along with, seating arrangements on every outer side.
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Apmhitheatre
is introduced
into new
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plan
,
especially
for concerts, where once the area
was occupied
with musicians on stage.
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Today
's
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plan
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changed
Pond with water plants into playground for young ones. Water pool with rocks can
be found
on the right-hand corner of the map,
in addition
, an entrance underground car park.

To lead to a conclusion, the new
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plan
is compact and
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organised
and
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many
variations
were carried
out except rose gardens and entrances.
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IELTS academic The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

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